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the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years

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The given line chart clearly depicts information regarding the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years in 3 particularly countries from 1940 to 2040. The 3 countries include United State of America (USA henceforth), Sweden, and Japan. Overall, it can be noticeable that there is an upward trend. In deep detail, it can be notice that the proportion of elder populations in the USA, Sweden, and Japan experienced the upward trend. To be specific, the proportion in the USA escalated gradually from 9% in 1940 to 15% in 1980 and then peak at 18% in 2040. Meanwhile, although the proportion in Sweden had boosted steadily from 7% at the beginning to 14% in 1960 before surging to 25% at the end. Finally, the proportion in Japan; there were a short dip from 5% to 4% in the first 40 years and then a dramatic rise to 26% at the end of period.

The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 line chart clearly
 depicts information regarding the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years in 3 particularly
 countries from 1940 to 2040. The 3 countries include United State of America (USA henceforth), Sweden, and Japan. Overall
, it can be noticeable that there is an upward trend.

In deep detail, it can be notice that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbulkscaleratiocapacityshareportion
proportion
 of elder populations in the USA, Sweden, and Japan experienced the upward trend. To be specific, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbulkscaleratiocapacityshareportion
proportion
 in the USA escalated gradually
 from 9% in 1940 to 15% in 1980 and then peak at 18% in 2040. Meanwhile, although the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbulkscaleratiocapacityshareportion
proportion
 in Sweden had boosted steadily
 from 7% at the beginning to 14% in 1960 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 surging to 25% at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
. Finally
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbulkscaleratiocapacityshareportion
proportion
 in Japan; there were a short dip from 5% to 4% in the first
 40 years and then a dramatic rise to 26% at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of period. 