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demand of electricity during summer and winters. The usage of current in households

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The graph provides the information for the need of electricity in england in days of summer and winter, while the pie chart illustrates the usage of electricity by average in English households. Overall, It is evident that the demand of electricity is higher in winter than in summers. However in both seasons the need of electricity fluctuated. In English households the highest ratio of current was accounted for heating rooms, and water. In summers, the need of electrcity is quite less in contrast to the need in winter. The daily demand ranged between 10000 units to 20000 units. The highest units of electricity was needed at 12 hours, taking up over 20000 units of current. In terms of current needed in winters, the numbers started at over 30000 units at 0 hours, However a rise and fall in units was recorded until 12 hours. Here afterwards, a steady rise was observed, followed by a sharp dip for the people who needed over than 24 hours of electricity In terms of the usage of current in households, The main purpose was accounted for heating rooms and heating water, taking up more than 50% of the total ratio, followed by ovens, kettles whose usage took second place in the use of electricty, at 17. 5%. Media electronics and electric appliances used a equal percentage of current, that is 15%.
The graph provides the information for the need of electricity

in
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england
in days of summer and
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winter
, while the pie chart

illustrates the usage of
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electricity
by average in English

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households
.

Overall
, It is evident that the demand of
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electricity
is higher

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in
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winter
than in summers.
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However
in both seasons the
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need


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of
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electricity
fluctuated. In English households the
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highest


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ratio
of
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current
was accounted
for heating rooms, and water.

In summers, the need of
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electrcity
is quite less
in contrast
to

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the
need in
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winter
. The daily demand ranged between 10000
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units


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to
20000
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units
. The highest
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units
of
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electricity
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was


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needed
at 12
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hours
, taking up over 20000
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units
of
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current
.

In terms of
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current
needed in
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winters
, the numbers
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started
at

over 30000
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units
at 0
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hours
,
However
a rise and fall in units

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was
recorded until 12
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hours
. Here afterwards, a steady
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rise


was observed
, followed by a sharp dip for the
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people
who

needed
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over
than 24
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hours
of electricity

In terms of the usage of
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current
in households, The main purpose

was accounted
for heating rooms and heating water, taking up

more than 50% of the total ratio, followed by ovens, kettles

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whose
usage took second place in the
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use
of
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electricty
, at 17. 5%.

Media electronics and electric appliances
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used
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a
equal

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percentage
of
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current
,
that is
15%.
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IELTS academic demand of electricity during summer and winters. The usage of current in households

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227 words
5.5
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