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The percentage of fruits and vegetables consumption

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The above chart indicates that consumption of fruits and veggies increased massively from 10 percent to more than 30 percent in years 2001 to 2006. But later on in next two years (2007 to 2008) consumption decreases in small scales. While it is quite clear that women are consuming more fruits and veggies than men and children, about 5% more than men and 7 to 8 percent than children. Men consuming averagely, men ratio remained almost same in 3 years from 2001 to 2003 while it got increased on normal scales in next 3 years. Likewise children consumption of fruits and vegetables also remained same from 2001 to 2003. And later on increased up to 28% till 2007. Children are only whose consumption increased after 2006. And consumption from men decreased after 2007. It is seem that year 2006 was peak year of fruits, veggies consumption because later on consuming ratio faced reduction from all resources.
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, about 5% more than
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and 7 to 8 percent than
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ratio remained almost same in 3 years from 2001 to 2003 while it
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