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The percentage of Australian men and women from different age groups who were actively involved in physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women from different age groups who were actively involved in physical activity in 2010. From the bar chart, we can clearly see that there is a gradual decline in the percentage (from 47. 7 percent to 39. 5 percent) of physical activities by men belonging to the first three different age groups i. e. , 15 to 24, 25 to 34, and 35 to 44. Although, there is an initial declination, the percentage of men's physical activities increased among the next three age groups, 43. 1 percent to 45. 1 percent, and that reached 47. 1 percent. In contrast to that, in terms of women, there is also a gradual rise among the first four age groups. Women belonging to the age group 65 and over were less likely to involved in a physical activity among all the other women's age groups. However, women were more inclined towards physical activities than men in the year of 2010.
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IELTS academic The percentage of Australian men and women from different age groups who were actively involved in physical activity in 2010

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