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Giraffes' favorite foods are acacia leaves and hey, they can enjoy 75 pounds of their food every day.

Giraffes' favorite foods are acacia leaves and hey, they can enjoy 75 pounds of their food every day. 73Ex3
The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obsess in one country, every ten years between 1965 and 2015. The first increase was during 1975 however, it was just a little over around 1-2%. According to the bar chart between 1985 and 1995, the number was suddenly increased to almost 60%, as we can see in 2005 more percent was rise. Finally, the bar chart clearly confirms it, after 1985 every ten years the percent of adults who have unhealthy weight increase. The bar chart ended in 2015 and the pie chart confirms the percentage weight range of adults which population in2015, according to the data of the pie chart around 80% of adults have an unhealthy weight, special 6% of them severely obese, their health is a dangurase level. The most percent of adults are obsessed, including 34% of adults in 2015. Their health is going to be at a medium level of risk.
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shows
the percentage of
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adults
who were overweight or obsess in one country, every ten years between 1965 and 2015. The
first
increase was during 1975
however
, it was
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just
a
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little
over around 1-2%. According to the bar
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between 1985 and 1995, the number was
suddenly
increased to almost 60%, as we can
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see
in 2005 more percent was rise.
Finally
, the bar
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chart
clearly
confirms it, after 1985 every ten years the percent of
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adults
who have unhealthy weight increase.

The bar
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chart
ended in 2015 and the pie
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chart
confirms the percentage weight range of
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adults
which population in2015, according to the data of the pie
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chart
around 80% of
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adults
have an unhealthy weight, special 6% of them
severely
obese, their health is a
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dangurase
level. The most percent of
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adults
are obsessed
, including 34% of
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adults
in 2015. Their health is going to be at a medium level of
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risk
.
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IELTS academic Giraffes' favorite foods are acacia leaves and hey, they can enjoy 75 pounds of their food every day.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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