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The pei chart shows the englan d and whales about hthe pppollaytopn size and buthe and the mortality rate in 1700 and 2000

The pei chart shows the englan d and whales about hthe pppollaytopn size and buthe and the mortality rate in 1700 and 2000 0APwq
The given line graph elucidates the data of England and Wales about population size in millions, whereas the birth and the death rate per thousand individuals from the year 1700 to 2000. Overall, it is clearly evident from the line graph that both the birth and the death rates show similar trend over the given time period, while population size shows an upward trend. To commence with, in 1700, the population number was 2 millions. Moreover, in the next 150 years the number fluctuated and recorded 10 millions in 1850. After which, there was a drastic hike recorded in the population size over the next two hundred years and the number accounted for 50 millions in the year 2000. Furthermore, the birth and mortality rate accounted for 30 and 26 per thousand people respectively in initial years. Till 1850 both the rate shows similar trend. However, in 1900, the birth rate was recorded 25 per thousand people and the death rate was 35 per 1000 people. In the next 50 years, mortality rate remained stable at 20 per 1000 individuals, while the birthdate witnessed a drastic increased and reach 34 per 1000 people.
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population
size in
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, whereas the
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birth
and the death
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rate
per thousand individuals from the
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1700 to 2000.

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population
size
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shows
an upward trend.

To commence with, in 1700, the
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number was 2
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millions
.
Moreover
, in the
next
150 years the number fluctuated and recorded 10
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millions
in 1850. After which, there was a drastic hike recorded in the
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population
size over the
next
two hundred years and the number accounted for 50
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millions
in the
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2000.

Furthermore
, the
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birth
and mortality
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accounted for 30 and 26 per thousand
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respectively
in initial years. Till 1850 both the
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similar trend.
However
, in 1900, the
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was recorded
25 per thousand
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and the death
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was 35 per 1000
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. In the
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50 years, mortality
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remained stable at 20 per 1000 individuals, while the birthdate witnessed a drastic increased and reach 34 per 1000
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.
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IELTS academic The pei chart shows the englan d and whales about hthe pppollaytopn size and buthe and the mortality rate in 1700 and 2000

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