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The parts are slow so slow number of students who chose 13th University subject in 2005 summer right information thing and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The parts are slow so slow number of students who chose 13th University subject in 2005 summer right information thing and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant LGrk6
The bar graph compares the number of students who were selected for various university subjects in 2005. The chart classifies the students according to the subject and divides these subject groups into males and females. Is it obvious from the chart that social sciences has been chosen the highest in all subjects by students. By contrast, the Arts had fewer students involved. Remarkably, humanities had as many males as females studied this subject. Sciences was one of the most popular choices for most students in 2005 with approximately 22, 000 people which was double females. There were nearly 19, 000 men joining mathematics. Strikingly, this number went up four-fold between men and women. Furthermore, the figures of male students picked literature and law were also higher than females, at about 15, 000 and 10, 000 respectively. On the other hand, females tend to choose less technical subjects such as: social sciences, languages, arts, while the least favorite choice was in mathematics. The interesting point is that, languages was the subject had the biggest difference between males and females with around over 15, 000. Social sciences was the most attractive to women with around 24, 000 students and the Arts was almost 10, 000 people.
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in 2005. The chart classifies the
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according to the
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subject
and divides these
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groups into
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males
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the highest in all
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by
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. By contrast, the Arts had fewer
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involved.
Remarkably
, humanities had as
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males
as
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studied this subject.

Sciences was one of the most popular choices for most
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in 2005 with approximately 22, 000
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which was double
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. There were
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men
joining mathematics.
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, this number went up four-fold between
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and women.
Furthermore
, the figures of male
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students
picked literature and law were
also
higher than
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females
, at about 15, 000 and 10, 000
respectively
.

On the other hand
,
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females
tend to choose less technical
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subjects
such as: social sciences, languages, arts, while the least favorite choice was in mathematics. The interesting point is that,
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languages


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the
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had the biggest difference between
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and
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with around over 15, 000. Social sciences was the most attractive to women with around 24, 000
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students
and the Arts was almost 10, 000
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IELTS academic The parts are slow so slow number of students who chose 13th University subject in 2005 summer right information thing and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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