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The picture illustrates the process of how vegetable oil is manufactured. In this procedure there are several steps which are untaken. Firstly, the seeds of olive seeds are picked up and sent for rinsing, which is done in cold water. Here seeds are sent through machine belt. After this seeds are forwarded to smashing machinery, by this olive seeds are formed into paste and stones. This substances are packed into bags which are having some types of holes on that. In addition to this the form of olive paste undergoes in the procedure of pressing where the seeds are compressed. Then the seeds go through the process of separating the water from seeds. Water is separated in this action then finally the olive oil and seeds are ready. At end they just pack oil in bottle and dispatch to their respective holders and they are also delivered to the stores. So, this was the process how vegetable oil is manufactured.
The picture illustrates the process of how vegetable
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oil
is manufactured
. In this procedure there are several steps which are
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untaken
.

Firstly
, the
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seeds
of olive
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seeds
are picked
up and
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sent
for rinsing, which
is done
in
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cold
water. Here
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seeds
are
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sent
through machine belt. After
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this
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seeds
are forwarded
to smashing machinery, by this olive
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seeds
are formed
into paste and stones.
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substances
are packed
into bags which are having
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some
types of holes on that.
In addition
to this the form of olive paste undergoes in the procedure of pressing where the
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seeds
are compressed
. Then the
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seeds
go through the process of separating the water from
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seeds
. Water
is separated
in this action then
finally
the olive
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oil
and
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seeds
are ready. At
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end they
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pack
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oil
in bottle and dispatch to their respective
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holders and
they are
also
delivered to the stores.
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oil
is manufactured
.
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