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The bar chart illustrates the changes in visiting four distinct museums in London between June and December. Overall, it can be seen that while the number of visitors to British museums experiences an increase, there is a decline in the number of visitors to other museums. First of all, except for June, the British museum represents the most visitors in all other months, beginning at410, 000 people, before going up dramatically to 700, 000 in August. However, that of figure plunge to480, 000 at the end of this period. The number of people who frequent history museum stands at a slightly lower figure than British museum, while, the gap between them becoming wider, and in December, that of British museum roughly two times as many as the history museum. Turning to science and national museums, in all months, the remainder museums have witnessed a decrease in the proportion of visitors. There is a slight fall in the number of visitors to the national museum from approximately 200, 000 to 190, 000, half of the number of people to the science museum. In contrast, that of science museum stand at420, 000, with the number reaching a peak in September in 500, 000, and go down to 300, 000 visitors in December.

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