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The line graph below shows the monthly revenue in 2008 of four shops that belong to a jewelry company.

The line graph below shows the monthly revenue in 2008 of four shops that belong to a jewelry company. q6E8D

The line graph makes an overview of monthly proceeds in four various jewelry shops within one company throughout the 12-month period in 2008. As an overall trend, the revenue rates in all the shops had a notable rise by the end of the given period. According to the graph, the proceeds in shop 1 went up substantially from 15, 000 euros in January to about 40, 000 euros in April, at which point the rate stagnated until October, but afterwards it increased to nearly 50, 000 euros. A similar situation can be observed for shop 2 where the income indicator started growing from May at 33, 000 euros to its peak of roughly 60, 000 euros in December. The opposite pattern is true for shop 3, whose income rate fell significantly from 70, 000 euros to its minimum of 40, 000 euros in April and it remained unchanged until June. However, in the second half of 2008 the revenue had an ongoing surge to its maximum value of 80, 000 euros in December. As for shop 4, its proceeds fluctuated considerably between 17, 000 euros in January to 32, 000 euros in July and December.

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