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The number of passengers using a metro station in Paris for a day

The number of passengers using a metro station in Paris for a day 63mr
The line graph presents the information about a metro station passengers in Paris for 6 to 22overall, the highest number of people used the metro station at 8 and 18 whereas the lowest number of passengers used the service at 16 to 17 in the given period. The number of passengers rose dramatically at 6 to 8 from 100 to 400. At the same time, between 12 to 14 the service of passengers were not change and the number is 250. By contrast the lowest number of passengers were seen less than 200 people at 21 to 22.
The line graph presents the information about a metro station
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in Paris for 6 to 22overall, the highest
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of
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people
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used
the metro station at 8 and 18 whereas the lowest
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of
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passengers
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used
the service at 16 to 17 in the
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given
period. The
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of
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rose
dramatically
at 6 to 8 from 100 to 400. At the same time,
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between 12 to 14
the service of
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were not
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change
and the
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number
is 250. By contrast the lowest
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number
of
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were
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seen
less than 200
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at 21 to 22.
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IELTS academic The number of passengers using a metro station in Paris for a day

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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