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The line graph presents the information about a metro station passengers in Paris for 6 am to 10 pm.

The line graph presents the information about a metro station passengers in Paris for 6 am to 10 pm. NGld
The line graph presents the information about a metro station passengers in Paris for 6 am to 10 pm. Overall, the highest number of people used the metro station at 8 am and 6 pm whereas the lowest number of passengers used the service at 4 pm to 5 pm in the given period. The number of passengers rose dramatically 100 to a peak of 400 at 6 am to 8 am. However the number dropped significantly by around 200 people approximately 10 am. On the other hand there was no variation from 12 pm to 2 pm and the number is less than 300. But the number of people decreased sharply at 4 pm below 100 people. Between 5 pm to 6 pm the number of passengers gradually increased at the same way. By contrast, the number of people fell substantially less than 200 people between 9pm and 10 pm.
The line graph presents the information about a metro station
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passengers
in Paris for 6 am to 10 pm.
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, the highest
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number
of
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people
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used
the metro station at 8 am and 6 pm whereas the lowest
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number
of
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passengers
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used
the service at 4 pm to 5 pm in the
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given
period. The
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number
of
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passengers
rose
dramatically
100 to a peak of 400 at 6 am to 8 am.
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However
the
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number
dropped
significantly
by around 200
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people
approximately 10 am.
On the other hand
there was no variation from 12 pm to 2 pm and the
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number
is less than 300.
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But
the
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number
of
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people
decreased
sharply
at 4 pm below 100
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people
. Between 5 pm to 6 pm the
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number
of
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passengers
gradually
increased at the same way. By contrast, the
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number
of
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people
fell
substantially
less than 200
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people
between 9pm and 10 pm.
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IELTS academic The line graph presents the information about a metro station passengers in Paris for 6 am to 10 pm.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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