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The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004.

The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. XQqP
The bar chart illustrates the figure of cosmetic produces performed on men and women in Korea in 2004. In general, it can be seen that eyelid surgery is accounting for the highest rate of women task while hair transplantation reach a peak of man task. In fact, surgery type liposuction and breast enlargements on women task constant the lowest number of procedures respectively 125 and 150 however Rhinoplasty and eyelid surgery make up for the highest proportion of procedures which is 270 and 320 and the last on women task is Laser skin Resurfacing elucidate around 210 and also the most stable part. By contrast, clearly to see that surgery type and abdominoplasty nearly equal low with a gap only 2 include of procedures for men task, opposite with women, Rhinoplasty is the most stabilities, laser skin resurfacing and hair transplantation rate for the highest figure of procedures.
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in Korea in 2004.

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that eyelid surgery is accounting for the highest rate of
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women
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while hair transplantation reach a peak of
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man
task.

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women
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constant the lowest number of
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procedures
respectively
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however
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procedures
which is 270 and 320 and the last on
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women
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task
is Laser skin Resurfacing elucidate around 210 and
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the most stable part. By contrast,
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to
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that surgery type and
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abdominoplasty
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2 include of
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procedures
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men
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, opposite with
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women
, Rhinoplasty is the most
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IELTS academic The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004.

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