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the bar chart shows the percentage of Australian children in sports

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The graph gave information about how boys and girls practice sports such as football, netball, swimming, basketball, and no sports in Australia. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of boys are active in football. Netball is famaus for girls. However in some sports boys and girls are fairly equal. . Boys prefer soccer and this participation rate reaching almost 20 percent. In contrast football seem to be not favourite sport for girls when its just take small percentage. The proportion of basketball both of them is increased from 5%. According to graph the most sport among girls is netball the persentage of up to exactly 17 %while boys play netball 3 rate. 16 percent girls go swimming whereas this participation of boys are 13 rate. So swimming is famous to boys and girls. Looking in datails girls practice sports little rate than boys.
The graph gave information about how
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such as football, netball, swimming, basketball, and no
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in Australia.
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are active in football. Netball is
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prefer soccer and this participation
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reaching almost 20 percent. In
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contrast
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percentage. The proportion of basketball both of them
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is netball the
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of up to exactly 17
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play netball 3
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