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The line graph compares the percentage of staff members trained by four companies from 2003 to 2006.

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The line graph compares the percentage of staff members trained by four companies from 2003 to 2006. It is clear that the proportion of staff trained by Company C was by far the highest over the three year period shown. However, a considerable rise can be seen in the percentage of of staff which whose training was provided by Company D with figures eventually surprising surpassing those for workers trained by for Company C trained workers. In 2003, almost 28% of the workers were trained by Company WB, while the figures for those who trained by Company D saw the lowest percentage with only 20%. , a Staff training provided by Company C for workers was about 2% lower than Company B did. Between 2004 and 2006 there was a gradual growth in the percentage of workers who were trained by Company D to around 36%. During the same period the figures for staff training provided by Company A slightly increased reaching a little under 35%, meanwhile the proportion of workers trained by Company C rose with a small fluctuation to 36%. There were no significant changes in the percentage of workers trained by Company B as a whole.
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IELTS academic The line graph compares the percentage of staff members trained by four companies from 2003 to 2006.

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