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The number of computers terminals available to students in different faculties of a university.

The table depicts the data about the quantity of computers allocated for the learners of different departments at university. It is immediately apparent that the students at science faculty were lucky to have more computers, while the students studying education weren’t proud of the distribution of computer terminals. It is clear that the whole number of university students is just under 2. 900, of which 240 with the lowest computers belong to agriculture faculty, while science department with equal number of students has the most computer networks. Subsequently, fewer than a third of university students are taught in education faculty, with the highest difference of only one computer for 36 students. Although engineering learners are about three times fewer than those studying education, they are supplied with more computer terminals, with the distribution of 1 to 8. Following that, 11 students in law department have to use one computer, in comparison with those in arts faculty who are provided with twice as many computers as law students.
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departments at university. It is immediately apparent that the
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students
at science faculty were lucky to have more computers, while the
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students
studying education weren’t proud of the distribution of computer terminals.

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clear
that the whole number of university
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students
is
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under 2. 900, of which 240 with the lowest computers belong to agriculture faculty, while science department with equal number of
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students
has the most computer networks.
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, fewer than a third of university
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students
are taught
in education faculty, with the highest difference of
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only
one computer for 36
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students
. Although engineering learners are about three times fewer than those studying education, they
are supplied
with more computer terminals, with the distribution of 1 to 8.

Following that, 11
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in law department
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one computer,
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computers as law
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students
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IELTS academic The number of computers terminals available to students in different faculties of a university.

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