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The number of college students who go to sporting events and various sporting events attended by college students.

The number of college students who go to sporting events and various sporting events attended by college students. ENXgq
The pie chart depicts the proportion of college learners who go to sporting events and do not go to sporting events, whereas the table illustrates about how many college scholars have attended five different sporting events, comprising the two genders such as male and female. Overall, it is apparent from the first chart that a plethora of students are not gravitated towards the sporting events, however the highest number of males have joined football as opposed to females. To commence with the pie chart, just more than two quarters if students of college have not gone to sportiy events which is less than the number of students going to sporting events by 69% that is 80%. It means that sports events are not popular among college pupils. Regarding with the table, at first glance, 34 male have attended football while only 1 female are interested in it. Similarly, the lowest figure is for tennis among male with 3. In contrast, 24 number of female joined in tennis. Likewise, merely 6 male have visited in badminton which is more than female by 1. The most noticeable point is that students in basketball are accounted for equal number of both genders that is 10.
The pie chart depicts the proportion of college learners who go to sporting
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events
and do not go to sporting
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events
, whereas the table illustrates about how
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many
college scholars have attended five
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different
sporting
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events
, comprising the two genders such as male and female.

Overall
, it is apparent from the
first
chart that a plethora of
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students
are not gravitated towards the sporting
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events
,
however
the highest
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number
of
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males
have
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joined
football as opposed to females.

To commence with the pie chart,
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just
more than two quarters if
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students
of college have not gone to
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sportiy
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events
which is less than the
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number
of
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students
going to sporting
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events
by 69%
that is
80%. It means that sports
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events
are not popular among college pupils.

Regarding with the table, at
first
glance, 34 male have attended football while
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only
1 female
are interested
in it.
Similarly
, the lowest figure is for tennis among male with 3.
In contrast
, 24
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number
of female
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joined
in tennis.
Likewise
,
merely
6 male have visited in badminton which is more than female by 1. The most noticeable point is that
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students
in basketball
are accounted
for equal
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number
of both genders
that is
10.
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IELTS academic The number of college students who go to sporting events and various sporting events attended by college students.

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