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The number of adults participating in different sports

The number of adults participating in different sports BYQG6
The bar chart illustrates the number of adults attendance in seven different types of sports in 1997 and 2017. Overall, the sports that has the most number of players is gentle walking during both of the years. In 1997, the lowest attendance of sports that the adults had attended is basketball, whereas the highest attendance is gentle walking, which has 50 thousand adults. In 2017, the lowest attendance of sports is cricket and the highest attended is gentle walking, which is slightly above 50 thousand. The sports for football and hiking has nearly the similar amount of players in 1997 and 2017, where the number is above 30 and below 50 thousands. As seen from the chart, for gym (aerobic), they have the same number of players, which is between the number 30-40 thousands. Similarly, for jogging, both the years has nearly the same among players. Cricket had a higher level of attendance in 1997 compared to 2017. The number of adults attending had decrease over the years. But for basketball, the number of adults attending had increase over the years by nearly 14 thousand.
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of players is gentle walking during both of the years.

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had attended is basketball, whereas the highest
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. In 2017, the lowest
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for football and hiking has
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is above 30 and below 50 thousands. As
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of players, which is between the
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30-40 thousands.
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in 1997 compared to 2017. The
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attending had decrease over the years.
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