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the number and the given pie chart depicts the proportion of inpatient and outpatients in the same 5 Australian states last year

the number and the given pie chart depicts the proportion of inpatient and outpatients in the same 5 Australian states last year lXG6Q

the given table illustrates the number and the given pie chart depicts the proportion of inpatient and outpatients in the same 5 Australian states last year. overall, the public hospitals had the highest number of patients compared with private hospitals. Besides, public overnight and public same day occupied more percentage than private overnight. As can be seen from the table, New south wales, victoria, Queensland have nearly the same total number of patients recorded. the highest cases in public general were registered in new south wales, 5, 816 which was 5 times higher than the cases in Western Australia and South Australia. Meanwhile, the private hospitals had fewer situations than the public hospital, virtually half of the stays in last year. The same as the public hospital, the 3 States that recorded the highest number of patients were New south wales, victoria, Queensland with 2, 012, 2, 047, 1, 850 respectively. In both hospitals, the psychiatric always had modest patient admissions under 200 cases. when it comes to the pie chart, it can be observed clearly that the public hospitals welcomed less than a third dweller, occupying 30% for each period day. the figures in the private facilities represented nearly a third of the percentage total last year, 14% and 26% respectively

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 pie chart depicts the proportion of inpatient and outpatients in the same 5 Australian states ‘last year’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
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