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A line graph which shows three bakeries’s income in London,in 2000-2010

A line graph which shows three bakeries’s income in London, in 2000-2010 n1ogl

This line graph provides some information about three bakeries‘ annual earnings in London in 2000 and 2010, a period of 11 years. Overall, two of these bakeries‘ earnings increased significantly. In contrast, one of them had a dramatic decrease in its earnings. First of all, Robbie‘s Bakery had an equal amount of income between 2000 and 2005, but after that the amount rocketed and this bakery achieve the most profit in comparison to other bakeries in 2010. Having said that, Bernie’s Buns has a similar trend with a few vicissitudes. This bakery which used to be the least Profitable one had an income rise and achieved second rank in this graph in 2010. However, one of the lines shows a declining trend. Lovely Loaves which had over 80, 000 pound yearly income in 2000 and used to be the most lucrative, had a dramatic fall, and in 2010 became the third bakery according to income rate in this graph. All in all, this graph shows data about these three bakeries’ yearly income changes and illustrates the differences between them.

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 information about three bakeries‘ annual earnings in London in 2000 and 2010, a period of 11 years.

Overall
, two of these bakeries‘ earnings increased significantly
. In contrast
, one of them had a dramatic decrease in its earnings.

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income
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but
 after that the amount rocketed and The verb 'achieve' is plural. Did you mean: "this bakery achieves"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?this bakery achieves
this bakery achieve
 the most profit in comparison
 to other bakeries in 2010. Having said that, Bernie’s Buns has a similar trend with a few vicissitudes. This bakery which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be the least Profitable one had an You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
 rise and achieved second rank in this graph in 2010.

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 a declining trend. Lovely Loaves which had over 80, 000 pound yearly You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
 in 2000 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be the most lucrative, had a dramatic fall, and in 2010 became the third bakery according to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
 rate in this graph.

All in all, this graph This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 data about these three bakeries’ yearly You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagerevenueprofitpaycash
income
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changes
 and illustrates the differences between them. 