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the modification of colwick arts centre

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The two maps demonstrate how the Colwick Arts Centre modified differently between 2005 and today. It is obvious that there are three main changes, including expansion areas, newborn buildings and recreation facilities. First, the concert hall and cinema that were in the same place today are separated and opened up into two adjacent blocks laid in the top-right of the corner. Meanwhiles, in that previous location, the central exhibition area is constructed instead. In 2005, there was only one meeting room but these structures now are split up into two boardrooms, which replaced the snack bar in the North West centre. For the galleries, they want to merge those two together and shift further to the left. To make the central area more diverse, numerous zones are added. The centre introduces the new drama studio places between the meeting room and cinema, the cafe places behind the gallery. And the wasteland in 2005 has now been developed with more trees, extra outdoor exhibition and performance area. So, it is clear that the Colwick Arts Centre has changed a lot during this period
The two maps demonstrate how the Colwick Arts
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Centre
modified
differently
between 2005 and
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today
. It is obvious that there are three main
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
, including expansion areas, newborn buildings and recreation facilities.

First
, the concert hall and cinema that were in the same place
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
are separated
and opened up into two adjacent blocks laid in the top-right of the corner.
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Meanwhiles
, in that previous location, the central exhibition area
is constructed
instead
.

In 2005, there was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one meeting room
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but
these structures
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
are split
up into two boardrooms, which replaced the snack bar in the North West
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
. For the galleries, they want to merge those two together and shift
further
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
.

To
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make
the central area more diverse, numerous zones are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
. The
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centre
introduces the new drama studio places between the meeting room and cinema, the
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cafe
places behind the gallery. And the wasteland in 2005 has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
been developed
with more trees, extra outdoor exhibition and performance area.

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So
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the Colwick Arts
Possible spelling mistake. 'Centre' is British English.
Centre
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
a lot during this period

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