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The maps shows the changes in paradise island in the past and today appearances.

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The two maps illustrate the paradise Island's changes occurred between the past and today's appearances. In general, it appears that Paradise Island has became much more modern, built-up island, with far more restaurants and other facilities. The only place that remained the same in Paradise Island over the period were the Rocks, Beach, pier and boat areas, apart from the Rocks, the rests have been changed considerably. The scientific research station in the middle of the town, for example, were replaced with swimming pool and hotel complex. Secondly, cruise ship in the south-west of Island is built in the present. Furthermore, there was the natural spring attraction in the east of the island in the past. The restaurant in the middle of the town, which is covered with the sea, is constructed. What's more, it is interesting to note that there has been a introduction of cycle paths in the Paradise Island's border. In additional, BBQ area and cafe in east side of the island are erected, which used to service for natural spring facilities in the island in the past.
The two maps illustrate the
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paradise Island
's
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changes
occurred between the past and
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today
's appearances.

In general
, it appears that
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Paradise
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Island
has
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became
much more modern, built-up
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island
, with far more restaurants and other facilities.

The
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only
place that remained the same in
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Paradise
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Island
over the period were the Rocks, Beach, pier and boat areas, apart from the Rocks, the rests have been
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changed
considerably
. The scientific research station in the middle of the town,
for example
,
were replaced
with swimming pool and hotel complex.
Secondly
, cruise ship in the south-west of
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Island
is built
in the present.
Furthermore
, there was the natural spring attraction in the east of the
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island
in the past.

The restaurant in the middle of the town, which
is covered
with the sea,
is constructed
. What's more, it is interesting to note that there has been
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a
introduction of cycle paths in the
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Paradise
Island's border. In additional, BBQ area and
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cafe
in east side of the
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island
are erected
, which
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used
to service for natural spring facilities in the
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island
in the past.
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