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The maps show the changes in a happy valley shopping center from 1982 to 2021.

The maps show the changes in a happy valley shopping center from 1982 to 2021. AjA2n
The two maps shown the some kind of changes that the happy valley shopping center during the period 1982 to 2021. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the shopping center witnessed dramatic changes over a period of two decades. The main changes was the addition of parking lot at the cost of garden. To begin with, in 1982 there was a garden surrounded to the layout. On the west side there was a small lack and there was a route to go at the entrance to valley shopping center, and it was the left side of the layout which opened in to lobby area. Coffee shop was upper side to lobby area. However, toilets were on the opposite side. Entertaimnet area is in the middle of shopping center. There were some kinds of shops to buy the items such as sports, electronics and furniture store are aginst to lobby area respectivily. Elevator is also give to go to 2nd floor and aginst the elerator there was a food store. However, in 2012 some kind of changes in this layout. The parking lot was constructed for the valley shopping center. At the upper side the parking lot there was a builed the furniture retail shop at the cost of lack, Entrance was slighty moved and lobby area and coffee were removed. Furniture retail shop was demolished and on that area food store was replaced. Sorts store and electronics store were also moved aginst the elevator. Themed restarunts were bulit in the east side of the layout and other remained changes.
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food
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