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Discuss the data given of five European countries, and make valuable comparisons and wrote about it

Discuss the data given of five European countries, and make valuable comparisons and wrote about it BJOD9
The given tables compare the top line figures of coffee and banana sold by Fairtrade organization in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. To give an overview, this data shows how the sales of coffee increased multifold in the UK in 2004 as compared to 1999. Likewise, the sale of coffee in Switzerland doubled in 2004. Similarly, Switzerland saw an increment of 3 more than 3 times in its sales of bananas in 2004 in comparison to 1999. To start off in 1999 UK recorded a sale of 1. 5 million but the sale saw a multifold increase of almost twenty times in 2000 with a sale of 20 million. On a similar line the sale of coffee doubled in Switzerland from three million in 1999 to six million in 2004. Similarly, Denmark and Belgium saw a surge in the sale of coffee in 2004 unlike Sweden where the sale of coffee declined. Talking about bananas, earnings of 15 million euros came from Switzerland in 1999 while the year 2000 saw a sale of 47 million a surge of almost 3 times. Likewise, UK saw an increase of 5. 5 times in the sales of banana with 1 million sale and 5. 5 million sale in 1999 and 2004 respectively. The sale in Belgium shot up by more than 4 times from 0. 6 million in 1999 to 4 million in 2004.
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Fairtrade
organization in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

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in Switzerland doubled in 2004.
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, Switzerland
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an increment of 3 more than 3
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doubled in Switzerland from three
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in 1999 to six
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, Denmark and Belgium
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declined.

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euros came from Switzerland in 1999 while the year 2000
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, UK
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an increase of 5. 5
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in 1999 and 2004
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. The
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in Belgium shot up by more than 4
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from 0. 6
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in 1999 to 4
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