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The maps show the change of fren ton from 1990 to 2012.

The maps show the change of fren ton from 1990 to 2012. pKe5m
A glance at the two maps represent about information of changes in fren ton between the years 1990 and 2012. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the major changes were hotel and golf course as well as tech no park built, whereas minor changes was the area of hospital expanded. First and foremost, in 1990 school located near bank, while hospital and library placed along side high street. In addition, shops connected with theatre, however houses and cafe and park were close together. After that, in year 2012 the area of hospital extended and it was joint with blocks of flats. Secondly, trees were cut down and constructed tech no park in year 2012. There were flats added in Northern part. Thirdly, cafe and park demolished and introduced hotel and golf course. Furthermore, playing field with trees cleared out in year 2012. Lastly, shops converted into supermarket in year 2012.
A glance at the two maps represent about information of
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changes
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fren
ton between the years 1990 and 2012.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that the major
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changes
were hotel and golf course
as well
as tech no
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park
built, whereas minor
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changes
was the area of hospital expanded.

First
and foremost, in 1990 school located near bank, while hospital and library placed
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along side
high street.
In addition
, shops connected with
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theatre
,
however
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houses
and
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cafe
and
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park
were close together. After that, in
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year
2012 the area of hospital extended and it was joint with blocks of flats.
Secondly
, trees were
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cut
down and constructed tech no
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park
in
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year
2012. There were flats
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added
in Northern part.
Thirdly
,
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cafe
and
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park
demolished and introduced hotel and golf course.
Furthermore
, playing field with trees cleared out in
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year
2012.
Lastly
, shops converted into supermarket in
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year
2012.
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IELTS academic The maps show the change of fren ton from 1990 to 2012.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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