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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. ‏Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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‏The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. ‏Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The map diagrams present the changes to a university campus from 2010 until now. Overall, in 2010 the university campus seemed to show more recreational level than it does now. When we take a look at the map it shows that the teaching block contained the arts and science was in one building in 2010 while now they separated into two buildings with more floors for the two. The shops are not excluded but rather integrated with student facilities, etc. In 2010, the lawn and seating area which it was surrounding the lake was removed but the lake still exists. The most remarkable change has been done that the student accommodation are built across the campus with three buildings which by the way that represents the number of students are than two times than in 2010.
‏The maps
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show
improvements that have
been made
to a university
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campus
between 2010 and the present day.

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Summarise
the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and
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make
comparisons where relevant.

The map diagrams present the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to a university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
from 2010 until
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

Overall
, in 2010 the university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
seemed to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
more recreational level than it does
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

When we take a look at the map it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the teaching block contained the arts and science was in one building in 2010 while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
they separated into two buildings with more floors for the two. The shops are not excluded
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but
rather
integrated with student facilities, etc.

In 2010, the lawn and seating area which it was surrounding the lake
was removed
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but
the lake
still
exists. The most remarkable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
has
been done
that the student accommodation
are built
across the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
with three buildings which by the way that represents the number of students are than two
Use "(times)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
times
than in 2010.

IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. ‏

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6.0
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