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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Mbga
The graphs show the enrolments of overseas and local students in Australian Universities over a decade. Firstly, we can see that a much high number of local students (about 117, 000) commencing in universities, compared to foreign students (about 11, 000). However, over the ten years, the number of foreign students increased slowly until 2009, after which increased a little by the end of 2010, while the graph for the number of local students commencing, fluctuates at 2002 and 2008, all over indicating a small growth in the ten years. Secondly, the total number of overseas students grew almost at a constant rate in 10 years. On the other hand, the total number of local students heightened till 2007 after which, the growth flattens to a constant carried out until 2010. Overall, the number of foreign students commencing rises at a greater rate than the local students, whilst the total number of foreign students expands at a higher rate in comparison to the local students over the ten-year period.
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enrolments
of overseas and
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local
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students
in Australian Universities
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over
a decade.

Firstly
, we can
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local
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students
(about 117, 000) commencing in universities, compared to
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foreign
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students
(about 11, 000).
However
,
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over
the ten years, the
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of
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foreign
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students
increased
slowly
until 2009, after which increased a
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little
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of 2010, while the graph for the
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local
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students
commencing, fluctuates at 2002 and 2008, all
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indicating a
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growth in the ten years.

Secondly
, the total
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number
of overseas
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students
grew almost at a constant rate in 10 years.
On the other hand
, the total
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number
of
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local
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students
heightened till 2007 after which, the growth flattens to a constant carried out until 2010.

Overall
, the
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number
of
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foreign
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students
commencing rises at a greater rate than the
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local
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students
, whilst the total
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number
of
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foreign
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students
expands at a higher rate
in comparison
to the
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local
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students
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over
the ten-year period.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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4 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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