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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.(task 1) Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring?(task 2)

TASK 1 The map illustrates various kinds of changes being made from the year 2010 till the present date to the university campus. Overall, the shops and restaurants have been relocated in one single building whereas, the area for lawn and seating has been eradicated. There has been an addition to the student accommodation facilities as compared to the campus structure in 2010. The lake has been the only place which has not gone through any renovation. The teaching block has been bifurcated into two separate building, namely the first building being only for arts and the latter one of science. The shops and restaurants have been removed and they have been relocated in the student facilities building in the south west region. The place for lawn and seating cannot be visible in the current map structure of the campus. There was only a single building back in 2010 for accommodation, but now there have been two addition buildings constructed, one just besides the old one and the second one in the east side of the campus. A new path has also been built for the student facilities. Task 2 It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the current scenario and they should be shut down. I agree with this statement because zoos have been resulted into places where animals are kept in a closed area for the entertainment of human beings. The problem with respect to zoos are, that the animals are captured by hunters when they are infants and they never expose them to wildlife. The main issue here is, when a particular species of animal or bird is not useful to the zoo they are sent back to the jungle and survival becomes almost impossible for them. For example if a tiger who is has attained adulthood in the zoo is sent back to the jungle it becomes very tough for the animal to hunt for food as there was ample food being provided back then in the zoo. The tiger has never been able to develop his hunting skills and this leads to the animal dying of starvation when left alone to survive. The solution for zoos would be wild life sanctuaries where the wild animals can live without being subject to living in a prison kind of an environment. There would be abundance of food and as the wild animal has been staying in the forest right from the moment they are born, they automatically are equipped with appropriate hunting skills. People can also benefit through this. For example, the Sanjay Gandhi National Park is a wild life sanctuary which has been home to numerous species. It also has accommodation facilities for tourist where they can live in the forest as a part of an enthralling experience. It can be concluded that, humans cannot survive in the forest it goes vice versa for the animals as well. Sanctuaries would be the best option if the zoos are shut because, there would be no harm to the environment and it would also help humans to learn about animals when they are kept in the wild itself.
TASK 1

The map illustrates various kinds of
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changes
being made
from the year 2010 till the present date to the university campus.

Overall
, the shops and restaurants have
been relocated
in one single
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building
whereas, the area for lawn and seating has
been eradicated
. There has been an addition to the student accommodation facilities as compared to the campus structure in 2010. The lake has been the
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only
place which has not gone through any renovation.

The teaching block has
been bifurcated
into two separate
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building
,
namely
the
first
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building
being
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only
for arts and the latter one of science. The shops and restaurants have been
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removed and
they have
been relocated
in the student facilities
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building
in the
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south west
region. The place for lawn and seating cannot be visible in the
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current
map structure of the campus.

There was
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only
a single
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building
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back
in 2010 for accommodation,
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but
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now
there have been two addition
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buildings
constructed, one
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just
besides
the
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old
one and the second one in the east side of the campus. A new path has
also
been built
for the student facilities.

Task 2

It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the
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current
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scenario and
they should
be shut
down. I
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agree
with this statement
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because
zoos have
been resulted
into places where
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animals
are
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kept
in a closed area for the entertainment of human beings.

The problem with respect to zoos are, that the
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animals
are captured
by hunters when they are
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infants and
they never expose them to wildlife. The main issue here is, when a particular species of
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animal
or bird is not useful to the zoo they are
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sent
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back
to the jungle and survival becomes almost impossible for them.
For example
if a tiger who is has attained adulthood in the zoo is
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sent
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back
to the jungle it becomes
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very
tough for the
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animal
to hunt for food as there was ample food
being provided
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back
then in the zoo. The tiger has never been able to develop his hunting
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skills
and this leads to the
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animal
dying of starvation when
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left
alone to survive.

The solution for zoos would be wild life sanctuaries where the wild
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animals
can
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live
without being subject to living in a prison
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kind of an
environment. There would be abundance of food and as the wild
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animal
has been staying in the forest right from the moment they
are born
, they
automatically
are equipped
with appropriate hunting
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skills
.
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People
can
also
benefit through this.
For example
, the Sanjay Gandhi National Park is a wild life sanctuary which has been home to numerous species. It
also
has accommodation facilities for tourist where they can
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live
in the forest as a part of an enthralling experience.

It can
be concluded
that, humans cannot survive in the forest it goes vice versa for the
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animals
as well
. Sanctuaries would be the best option if the zoos
are shut
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because
, there would be no harm to the
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environment and
it would
also
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help
humans to learn about
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animals
when they are
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kept
in the wild itself.
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IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. (task 1) Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? (task 2)

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