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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day

The maps show the improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the presnt day. First, in 2010 there are Two buildings of Studend accomodation comparing now there is another building. Two are together and one over the road. Second, the Shops, Restarunt and University offices gathering into one area Student facillities. Around compus 2010 Art and Science were on the same builidng but in campus now we can distinguish of the separate between them. Lawn and seating area diminish totally the road became to be broader. In conclusion abundance of changes were happen over the years.
The maps
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show
the improvements that have
been made
to a university campus between 2010 and the
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presnt
day.

First
, in 2010 there are Two buildings of
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Studend
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accomodation
comparing
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now
there is another building. Two are together and one over the road.

Second, the Shops,
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Restarunt
and University offices gathering into one area Student
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facillities
.

Around
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compus
2010 Art and Science were on the same
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builidng
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but
in campus
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now
we can distinguish of the separate between them.

Lawn and seating area diminish
totally
the road became to be broader.

In conclusion
abundance of
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changes
were
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happen
over the years.
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IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
101 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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