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The maps show a renovation of the park in Canada.

The maps show a renovation of the park in Canada. Ky3x0
These two maps illustrate a park in Canada in 1995 and after a renovation project in 2015. Look at the map before the renovation, the park has just a parking area, campsite, in the west of the park, the information area, in the left of the river, and the marina. But in 2015, the park was reconstructed, It has walking and biking ways, from the bus stop in the north of the park to another bus stop near the marina.  Moreover, the park has been built the bus route from the shuttle bus stop across the river to the parking car on another side of the park. Furthermore, there are expand the marina and build one more campsite on the right side of the marina. In the centre of the park, it has a cafe next to the information area which was moved from the north down to the centre nearby the river. On building which has remained the same from 1995, for example, the waterfall and hills in the north, and also highway number 25 which across the park from the north to the south. Overall, the maps compare the changes of Canada's park both before and after the renovation.
These two maps illustrate a
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in Canada in 1995 and after a renovation project in 2015.

Look at the map
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before
the renovation, the
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has
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a parking area, campsite, in the west of the
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, the information area, in the
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left
of the river, and the marina.
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in 2015, the
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was reconstructed
, It has walking and biking ways, from the bus
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stop
in the
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north
of the
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to another bus
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stop
near the marina.  
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, the
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has
been built
the bus route from the shuttle bus
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 across the river to the parking car on another side of the
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park
.
Furthermore
, there are
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the marina and build one more campsite on the right side of the marina. In the
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centre
 of the
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park
, it has a
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cafe
next
to the information area which was
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moved
from the
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north
down to the
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centre
nearby the river.

On building which has remained the same from 1995,
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, the waterfall and hills in the
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north
, and
also
highway number 25 which across the
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park
from the
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to the south.

Overall
, the maps compare the 
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of Canada's park both
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before
and after the renovation.
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