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The maps reveal the change of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period of 2008 to 2012.

The maps reveal the change of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period of 2008 to 2012. 3AnQ5
The maps reveal the change of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period of 2008 to 2012. Overall, except for the special exhibition room and the shop, the rest of the South Wing saw a major transformation. In 2008, the South Wing was a two-storey building with a path on the west. The entrance and reception were located on the second floor, and there was also a reading area adjacent to it. Visitors can take the stairs between the shop and the cloaks room to the ground floor. On the ground floor, there was a special exhibition room next to the shop. By the year 2012, this building had four storeys with a lift from the first floor to the top floor. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloakroom, which was moved to the reception. On the second floor, a self-service café was opened towards the eastern side of the lift above the reading room. On the west of the lift, above the reception and cloakroom, a restaurant was constructed. Another exhibition room was built on the topmost floor above the café. Above the special exhibition room, an entrance hall was made, which had a terrace above it.
The maps reveal the
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of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period of 2008 to 2012.

Overall
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the special exhibition
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and the shop, the rest of the South Wing
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saw
a major transformation.

In 2008, the South Wing was a
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two-storey
building with a path on the west. The entrance and reception
were located
on the second
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floor
, and there was
also
a reading area adjacent to it. Visitors can take the stairs between the shop and the cloaks
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room
to the ground
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floor
. On the ground
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, there was a special exhibition
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room
next
to the shop.

By the year 2012, this building had four
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storeys
with a lift from the
first
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floor
to the top
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floor
. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloakroom, which was
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moved
to the reception. On the second
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floor
, a self-service café
was opened
towards the eastern side of the lift
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above
the reading
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room
. On the west of the lift,
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above
the reception and cloakroom, a restaurant
was constructed
. Another exhibition
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room
was built
on the topmost
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floor
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above
the café.
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Above
the special exhibition
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, an entrance hall
was made
, which had a terrace
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above
it.
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IELTS academic The maps reveal the change of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the period of 2008 to 2012.

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