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The bar graph below shows the numbers of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia in the year 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information

The bar graph below shows the numbers of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia in the year 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information jo7jp

The bar chart compares the numbers of men and women employees by seven catalogues in Australia throughout 2003. Overall, it was evident that many Australian employers hired more men than women in most occupations. Of the seven careers, clerical was the most favourable. It is noticeable that in all jobs except professionals and clerical numerous males are employed than females, especially the difference in tradespersons to 800. The difference was smaller in professionals and office work, which the gap is roughly 50 to 100 in each field. Australia hired well over 950 women and nearly 900 men in the position of clerical, which is the highest figure on the chart. The data show that both males and females do office work more than other occupations from 250 to 850.

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 and women employees by seven Possible spelling mistake. 'catalogues' is British English.catalogs
catalogues
 in Australia throughout 2003.

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men
 than women in most occupations. Of the seven careers, clerical was the most Possible spelling mistake. 'favourable' is British English.favorable
favourable
.

It is noticeable that in all jobs except professionals and clerical numerous males are employed
 than females, especially
 the difference in Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "tradespeople", the plural form of the noun 'tradesperson'?tradespeopletrades persons
tradespersons
 to 800. The difference was smaller in professionals and office work, which the gap is roughly 50 to 100 in each field.

Australia hired well over 950 women and nearly
 900 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 in the position of clerical, which is the highest figure on the chart. The data This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 that both males and females do office work more than other occupations from 250 to 850. 