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The maps illustrate the developments which have taken place in the town Denham from 1986 to 2021

The maps illustrate the developments which have taken place in the town Denham from 1986 to 2021 8g0b5
The maps illustrate the developments which have taken place in the town Denham since 1986. Overall, in the period from 1986 onward, the village witness significant changes. It is noticeable that we have the house and the retirement home instead of the farmland, shop and the garden. Looking at the maps in more detail, it can be seen that in 1986 the first and the second farmland was located to the North East and the South West of the township, respectively. However, nowadays, all grazing land demolished to make away for new accommodations. Beside, housing area situated in the left of the main road fairly close to bridge has been expanded and replaced two shops. Furthermore with the present, the main road and the bridge over the river have remained unchanged since 1986, while the primary school has been narrowed. Additionally, the logging area has been built on the original site of the old gardens were in front of the three large houses, converted into a retirement home by adding two houses on two sides.
The maps illustrate the developments which have taken place in the town
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Denham
since 1986.

Overall
, in the period from 1986 onward, the village witness significant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. It is noticeable that we have the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and the retirement home
instead
of the farmland, shop and the garden.

Looking at the maps in more detail, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that in 1986 the
first
and the second farmland
was located
to the North East and the South West of the township,
respectively
.
However
, nowadays, all grazing land demolished to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
away for new accommodations. Beside, housing area situated in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
of the main road
fairly
close to bridge has
been expanded
and replaced two shops.

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Furthermore
with the present, the main road and the bridge over the river have remained unchanged since 1986, while the primary school has
been narrowed
.
Additionally
, the logging area has
been built
on the original site of the
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old
gardens were in front of the three large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
, converted into a retirement home by adding two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
on two sides.
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