Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The maps illustrate some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip.

The maps illustrate some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip. 0E2bq
The maps illustrate some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that principle change to the town will be construction of a ring road around the center. Various other development with regard to shops and housing will accompany the building of this road. Looking at the map of Islip as it's now, we can see that a main road runs through its center from east to west. The second map shows the planned pedestrianization of this road road. The two side road are to be turned into a dual carriageway, extending to the Countryside north of the town center. All the shops north of the main road are to be demolished to construction of shopping center, which is to have a car park and bus station nearby. There are also plans to build some new housing northeast of the main road. To the south of the main road are some shops and housing. The shops are to remain unchanged. Whereas, the housing is to be relocated. Lastly some parts of the park are going to be cleared so that new residential buildings can be built and an extension is planned for the school.
The maps illustrate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
proposed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to the central area of the town of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Islip
.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that principle
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to the town will be construction of a ring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
around the center. Various other development with regard to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
and housing will accompany the building of this road.

Looking at the map of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Islip
as it's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
runs through its center from east to west. The second map
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the planned pedestrianization of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
. The two side
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
are to
be turned
into a dual carriageway, extending to the Countryside north of the town center.

All the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
north of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
are to
be demolished
to construction of shopping center, which is to have a car park and bus station nearby. There are
also
plans to build
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
new housing northeast of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
. To the south of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
and housing. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
are to remain unchanged.
“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, the housing is to
be relocated
.
Lastly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
parts of the park are going to
be cleared
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that new residential buildings can
be built
and an extension
is planned
for the school.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The maps illustrate some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    The bar chart shows the comparitive selling rate of four types of books in London book fair in 2013
    The bar graph illustrates the comparitive selling rate of different types of books issued in London book fair in year 2013. Overall, Hobby books was the highest issued in London book fair whereas Biographies was the lowest. It can be clearly seen that, Art books was issued 150 whereas Children boo...
  • 6band
    average carbon di oxide emissions per person in four different European countries
    The graph illustrates the amount of average carbon di oxide emissions per person in four different European countries during the period between 1967 and 2007. Overall, United Kingdom’s average Co2 emission was high throughout the period between 1967 to 2007. While Portugal and Sweden shared the low...
  • 5band
    money spent in a year by a perticular school
    The pie chart illustrates how a children's charity in the USA allocates its finances in one year. Overall, the revenue of 53, 561, 580$ is generated by the school, and 53, 224, 896$ is spent each year. The biggest source of contribution is donated food. On the other hand, Program services are the m...
  • 6band
    Three pie charts show the proportions of Korean video games in terms of gender, age, and best-selling games in 2003.
    The given data illustrate the percentage of Korean video games with respect to the age of players, gender and best selling electronic games in 2003 in the form of pie charts. It is clear that the people belonging to the age group 18-35 are most involved in playing video games. Approximately, three-...
  • 6band
    weight assessment of inhabitants of Newtown in 2010
    The bar chart illustrates the information about the weight range of different age groups of people dwelling in Newtown in the year 2010 and I’ll describe it by dividing them to below and over 49 years old. Overall, it stands out from the graph that highest proportion of residents in this town have ...
  • 5band
    The percentage of driving test takers in Asia country.
    The bar chart provides information about rate of female and male in one Asia country who passed when they took their driving test in the years 1998 and 2010. Overall, There are two categories and There are 4 years final information. The most result is represented by women and the least percentage i...