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The bar chart shows the comparitive selling rate of four types of books in London book fair in 2013

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The bar graph illustrates the comparitive selling rate of different types of books issued in London book fair in year 2013. Overall, Hobby books was the highest issued in London book fair whereas Biographies was the lowest. It can be clearly seen that, Art books was issued 150 whereas Children books was little more with 160. However, Fairy tales were 60. Hobby books was the highest with 300 books issued. Accordingly, Religious Books was 110 and Biographies sales was the least 20.
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150 whereas Children
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was 110 and Biographies sales was the least 20.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the comparitive selling rate of four types of books in London book fair in 2013

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