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The maps illustrate of Happy Valley shopping center between 1982 and 2012

The maps illustrate of Happy Valley shopping center between 1982 and 2012 m85XA
The maps depict the experienced modernisation and urbanization of shopping center called Happy Valley from 1982 to 2012. Overall, it is clear that the redevelopment resulted in expansion of the shopping mall and rearrangement of its in-house facilities. According to maps, by 2012, Furniture Retail and Parking Lot had been constructed in the west of the town, which necessitated the extenction of Lake, road and trees, which located in the South-west of the map. Looking at the in-house, Electronics and Sports stores, which were coffee shop and food store in 1982, was replaced in 2012. Coffee shop modernisated and, named Themed, restaurant was built in the east of the in-house. Food store was relocated in the South of Themed restaurant. In addition, Lobby area was knoced down and reconstructed, with entrance. Looking at the maps in less details it can be seen that, toilets and elevator, which located in the bottom of the in-house, remained unchanged and trees were also reduced during the given period.
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depict the experienced
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modernisation
and urbanization of shopping center called Happy Valley from 1982 to 2012.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that the redevelopment resulted in expansion of the shopping mall and rearrangement of its in-
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house
facilities.

According to
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, by 2012, Furniture Retail and Parking Lot had
been constructed
in the west of the town, which necessitated the
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extenction
of Lake, road and trees, which located in the South-west of the
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map
. Looking at the in-
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house
, Electronics and Sports stores, which were coffee shop and food store in 1982,
was replaced
in 2012. Coffee shop
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modernisated
and, named Themed, restaurant
was built
in the east of the in-
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house
. Food store
was relocated
in the South of Themed restaurant.
In addition
, Lobby area was
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knoced
down and reconstructed, with entrance.

Looking at the
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in
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less
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it can be
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seen
that, toilets and elevator, which located in the bottom of the in-
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house
, remained unchanged and trees were
also
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reduced
during the
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given
period.
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IELTS academic The maps illustrate of Happy Valley shopping center between 1982 and 2012

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