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The maps give us information about the differences and the transformations of many rooms of ground-floor in Art gallery

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The maps give us information about the differences and the transformations of many rooms of ground-floor in Art gallery between 2015 and the present day. In general, many facilities were built or some were removed, which have changed significantly the ground floor of the gallery. Basically, some rooms have not been removed and changed from 2015 to the present day. Those are the 3 exhibition rooms located on the right side of the entrance when you enter. Besides, some other facilities have been changed but not too significant such as the stairs being moved a little bit to the left, building an elevator next to the stairs, and finally, the receptionist being changed slightly forward. About the transformations of the ground floor layout of the gallery from 2015 to now, it’s also had a lot of changes. In 2015, there was have 4 exhibition rooms, which had 3 rooms on 1 side, and 1 room on 1 side. But now, 1 room was removed and is replaced by the temporary exhibition and the children’s area. On the other hand, the gallery office and the coffee shop were changed to the gallery shop. And next to the gallery shop, they put a vending machine, which is in the corner out of the shop.
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