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The diagram below show process of chocolate making.

The diagram below show process of chocolate making. pK5q0
The provided diagram reveals the proceeding of produce chocolate from cocoa seeds. At the first stage, The development of chocolate procedurecommences with the grading cocoa beans at this stage grinder parts send to the cocoa liquor and simultaneously waste products take out. One the second stage, for pressing and industrial chocolates' element sent from liquor in which product taken out during the pressing stage, that is cocoa butter and cocoa powder. On the one hand, cocoa powder sent to the food factory which, Whereas Cocoa butter along with sugar and some ingredients added to industrial chocolate to make chocolate bar. One the other hand, Cocoa powder used in food industry. All in all it can be eventually commented that chocolate bar with cocoa powder at areproducts made out from this course
The provided diagram reveals the proceeding of produce chocolate from cocoa seeds.

At the
first
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stage
, The development of chocolate
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procedurecommences
with the grading cocoa beans at this
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stage
grinder parts
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send
to the cocoa liquor and
simultaneously
waste products take out.

One the second
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stage
, for pressing and industrial chocolates' element
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sent
from liquor in which product taken out during the pressing
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stage
,
that is
cocoa butter and cocoa powder.

On the one hand, cocoa powder
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sent
to the food factory which, Whereas Cocoa butter along with sugar and
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some
ingredients
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added
to industrial chocolate to
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make
chocolate bar.

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One
the other hand, Cocoa powder
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used
in food industry.

All in all it can be
eventually
commented that chocolate bar with cocoa powder at
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areproducts
made out from this course
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IELTS academic The diagram below show process of chocolate making.

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
130 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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