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The maps describe a scenery view of the beachfront zone in Australia in 1950 and the present day.

The maps describe a scenery view of the beachfront zone in Australia in 1950 and the present day. a7gEG
The maps describe a scenery view of the beachfront zone in Australia in 1950 and the present day. Overall, it is clear that the beachfront now have two surf club facilities and a new restaurant in this area. Also, the road now extends as far as the lighthouse. In 1950, there was only a car park in the area. That car park is now larger, and also the playground in this zone is converted into a smaller car park. However, the dining tables and pavilion remain unchanged in the same place. The road finished at the car park in 1950, but now it continues to develop to the lighthouse. The most noticeable change is there were two pools of 25 meters in 1950, and from now, this area has only just one 25 meter pool, and a new 50-meter pool has taken the place of the other smaller pool. There are two surf clubs now located part of the beachfront. Particularly, one club is next to the 50-meter pool, while the other club is near the lighthouse. Although the area had no restaurant in 1950, there is now a new restaurant is opened up behind the 50-meter pool and one of the surf clubs.
The maps
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describe
a scenery view of the beachfront zone in Australia in 1950 and the present day.

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, it is
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clear
that the beachfront
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now
have two surf
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club
facilities and a new restaurant in this
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area
.
Also
, the road
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now
extends as far as the lighthouse.

In 1950, there was
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a
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car
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park
in the
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area
. That
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car
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park
is
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now
larger, and
also
the playground in this zone
is converted
into a smaller
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car
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park
.
However
, the dining tables and pavilion remain unchanged in the same place. The road finished at the
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car
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park
in 1950,
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now
it continues to develop to the lighthouse.

The most noticeable
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change
is there were two
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pools
of 25
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meters
in 1950, and from
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now
, this
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area
has
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one 25
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meter
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pool
, and a new
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50-meter
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pool
has taken the place of the other smaller
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pool
. There are two surf
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clubs
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now
located part of the beachfront.
Particularly
, one
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club
is
next
to the
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50-meter
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pool
, while the other
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club
is near the lighthouse. Although the
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had no restaurant in 1950, there is
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a new restaurant
is opened
up behind the
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50-meter
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pool
and one of the surf
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clubs
.
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IELTS academic The maps describe a scenery view of the beachfront zone in Australia in 1950 and the present day.

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204 words
6.5
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