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The diagram describes the water cycle in the nature.

The diagram describes the water cycle in the nature. DVbJo
The diagram describes the water cycle in the nature. In general, there are several stages involving the water’s movement through various areas. The cycle begins as water falls from clouds in the sky, causing weather effects like rain and snow. As the liquid reaches the land, it seeps through upper ground layers to arrive at the first rock-containing layer where it becomes groundwater. Some of the liquid enters a well piercing into the groundwater zone, then flows into a pipe that leads to a house where the water is utilized for numerous purposes. Meanwhile, the remaining water continues travelling through bedrock, a layer that lays beneath the groundwater area. Afterward, the water rises to the surface, creating lakes and rivers. Under extreme heat exerted by the sun, the liquid is next evaporated to become gas. The air then flies to the sky, in which the steam is cooled so that clouds are formed. Being affected by gravity, the clouds drop their water droplets that are produced during the cooling process, repeating the whole cycle.
The diagram
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describes
the
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water
cycle in the nature.
In general
, there are several stages involving the
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water’s
movement through various areas.

The cycle
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begins
as
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water
falls from clouds in the sky, causing weather effects like rain and snow. As the liquid reaches the land, it seeps through upper ground layers to arrive at the
first
rock-containing layer where it becomes groundwater.
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Some of the
liquid enters a well piercing into the groundwater zone, then flows into a pipe that leads to a
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house
where the
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water
is utilized
for numerous purposes. Meanwhile, the remaining
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water
continues travelling through bedrock, a layer that lays beneath the groundwater area.

Afterward, the
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water
rises to the surface, creating lakes and rivers. Under extreme heat exerted by the sun, the liquid is
next
evaporated to become gas. The air then flies to the sky, in which the steam
is cooled
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so
that clouds
are formed
. Being
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affected
by gravity, the clouds drop their
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water
droplets that
are produced
during the cooling process, repeating the whole cycle.
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