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The maps demonstrate how Winston town evolved over a course of 5 years starting from 2009.

The maps demonstrate how Winston town evolved over a course of 5 years starting from 2009. B7Ao5
The maps demonstrate how Winston town evolved over a course of 5 years starting from 2009. As can be seen in the maps, it is clearly evident that the area witnessed some changes through the period. The most significant changes can be seen are the disappearance of industrial area and the development of natural beauty. During the 2009 period, the whole town was an industrial area. There was a school and a convention area above the town. To the north east of the area, two swimming pools were erected next to the sea. Besides, the fishing area was also constructed to the east of the town. In the circle area, there was a lake and a number of trees in front of the school. Moreover, several houses were built in the center of Winston town. After 5 years, the area experienced the planting of many trees which leads to the demolition of the industrial zone. The school and conference hall still exist in the same position. For education purposes, a university building was erected close to the resident’s houses. In addition, the number of residential areas was doubled. To the sea way, a harbor was constructed for the development of the commercial industry.
The maps demonstrate how Winston
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evolved over a course of 5 years starting from 2009.

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through the period. The most significant
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are the disappearance of industrial
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area
and the development of natural beauty.

During the 2009 period, the whole
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town
was an industrial
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area
. There was a school and a convention
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above the
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town
. To the
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north east
of the
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area
, two swimming pools
were erected
next
to the sea.
Besides
, the fishing
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area
was
also
constructed to the east of the
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town
. In the circle
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area
, there was a lake and a number of trees in front of the school.
Moreover
, several
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houses
were built
in the center of Winston town.

After 5 years, the
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area
experienced the planting of
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many
trees which leads to the demolition of the industrial zone. The school and conference hall
still
exist in the same position. For education purposes, a university building
was erected
close to the resident’s
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houses
.
In addition
, the number of residential
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areas
was doubled
. To the sea way, a harbor
was constructed
for the development of the commercial industry.
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