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The maps below show the Happy Valley shopping centre since 1982 till 2012.

The maps below show the Happy Valley shopping centre since 1982 till 2012. DYVrk
These two maps outline the radical changes that the Happy Valley Shopping centre underwent during the period 1982 and 2012. According to the maps, it is clear that the commerce centre redevoloped carring out for tourism purpose over the 30 years. Despide changes in the area the trees were preserved. One change is that stands out that the Lake to the west- north of the shopping centre was demolished and built Furniture Retail over the whole period. Another change is that on the corner, on the south- west side of the centre was built Parking Lot for custumers' transport, and it is naer the Enterance of the shopping centre, looking glance to the map in 1982 there was a Lobby area. On the west- north corner of the centre were Coffee shop and next to it Food store. It can be notice not only those two stories but some more points replaced inside of the Shopping complex. Over all the, Happy Valley Shopping centre became more comfortable and attractive. Some of the stores were preserved as the Entermainment and Elevator which leads to the 2nd floor. In 2012 year the Centre was accaounted the most popular shopping centre for tourists.
These two maps outline the radical
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changes
that the Happy Valley
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Shopping
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centre
underwent during the period 1982 and 2012. According to the maps, it is
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clear
that the commerce
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centre
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redevoloped
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carring
out for tourism purpose over the 30 years.
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Despide
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changes
in the area the trees
were preserved
. One
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change
is that stands out that the Lake to the west- north of the
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shopping
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centre
was demolished
and built Furniture Retail over the whole period. Another
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change
is that on the corner, on the south- west side of the
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centre
was built
Parking Lot for
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custumers
' transport, and it is
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naer
the
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Enterance
of the
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shopping
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centre
, looking glance to the map in 1982 there was a Lobby area. On the west- north corner of the
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centre
were Coffee shop and
next
to
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it Food
store. It can be notice not
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only
those two stories
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some
more points replaced
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inside of
the
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Shopping
complex. Over all
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the,
Happy Valley
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Shopping
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centre
became more comfortable and attractive.
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Some of the
stores
were preserved
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Entermainment
and Elevator which leads to the 2nd floor. In 2012 year the
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Centre
was
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accaounted
the most popular
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centre
for tourists.
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IELTS academic The maps below show the Happy Valley shopping centre since 1982 till 2012.

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