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The maps below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000

The maps below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000 Eqqar
The maps illustrate the improvement of the village of Kelsbey in the period of 220 years. It is evident from the supplied information that citizens in that area had been increased from one hundred to five hundred and that phenomenon led to a vast array of changes in that region. In the first place, the river which flew from the north to the south remained for a long time. Nevertheless, there was an appearance of the new bridge built in 1860 and still existed in 2000. In the northeast of the river, a road was constructed linked to the residents' area in 1860 and maintained to 2000. Furthermore, there were five shops and a wetland for birds erected to the southeast part of the river. In 1860, the growing number of houses from one hundred homes to two hundred ones resulted in the significant shortening of farms and woods in that region. To add to this, in the year 2000, it can be seen a fifth times increase of the number of homes in that area through 220 years. That matter caused the complete disappearance of farms and woods to make room for the road connected with the two new schools and three sports fields.
The maps illustrate the improvement of the village of
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Kelsbey
in the period of 220 years.

It is evident from the supplied information that citizens in that area had
been increased
from one hundred to five hundred and that phenomenon led to a vast array of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in that region.

In the
first
place, the river which flew from the north to the south remained for a long time.
Nevertheless
, there was an appearance of the new bridge built in 1860 and
still
existed in 2000. In the northeast of the river, a road
was constructed
linked to the residents' area in 1860 and maintained to 2000.
Furthermore
, there were five shops and a wetland for birds erected to the southeast part of the river.

In 1860, the growing number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
from one hundred homes to two hundred ones resulted in the significant shortening of farms and woods in that region. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
to this, in the year 2000, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
a fifth times increase of the number of homes in that area through 220 years. That matter caused the complete disappearance of farms and woods to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
room for the road connected with the two new schools and three sports fields.
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IELTS academic The maps below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000

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