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The Bar graph elucidates the amount of money spent in different forms of entertainment in different countries over a period of 5 years between 1995 and 2000.

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The Bar graph elucidates the amount of money spent in different forms of entertainment in different countries over a period of 5 years between 1995 and 2000. Overall, the amount spent in 2000 combined for different forms of entertainment was seen to be higher than in 1995 in all three countries. The money spent on televion by asia was slight less than a quarter, where as europe and united states spent around an half. There was an increase in the amount spent on televion by all the countries from 1995 to 2000. The amount of money spent by united states on publishing was constant over the period of five years. Europe and asia has spent significantly lesser amount on publishing compared to United states which was seen to be around one third. The amount spent on video and cinema by all the countries was found to be in a neglible proportion. The amount spent on music by asia and united states was found to increase slightly whereas by europe it was found to be steady over the same period.
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