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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort Templeton between 1990 and 2005. pQX9
The main changes of the seaside resort commencing from 1990 to 2005 is illustrated in two dissimilar maps. It is apparent from information supplied that the maps was significant changes and some facilities was added, converted and moved. In the year of 1990, there were several distribution of residences and facilities in the seaside resort map, which had a number of trees. In the centre of this map from south to north, there was a great river flow which was separated housing and public facilities. On the left of the river was dominated by small dwellings, but there was a big home above the large lake and an apartement below main road in the west. Hospital, school and a few home were situated between the river and railway, whereby it had a railway station. By 2005, most of Templeton became crowded with buildings and fewer tree. At left-hand side, the small dwellings were replaced by tall buildings around the lake and the supermarket with new road, which located above three tall building. In right-hand side, the number of trees was converted by airport, several residences and factory. In addition, new railway that connected between west and east had also newly built.
The main
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changes
of the seaside resort commencing from 1990 to 2005
is illustrated
in two dissimilar
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maps
. It is apparent from information supplied that the
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maps
was significant
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changes
and
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some
facilities was
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added
, converted and
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moved
.

In the year of 1990, there were
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several distribution
of residences and facilities in the seaside resort
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map
, which had a number of trees. In the
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centre
of this
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map
from south to north, there was a great river flow which
was separated
housing and public facilities. On the
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left
of the river
was dominated
by
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small
dwellings,
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but
there was a
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big
home above the large lake and an
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apartement
below main road in the west. Hospital, school and a
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few home
were situated
between the river and railway, whereby it had a railway station.

By 2005, most of Templeton became crowded with buildings and fewer tree. At
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left
-hand side, the
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small
dwellings
were replaced
by tall buildings around the lake and the supermarket with new road, which located above three tall building. In right-hand side, the number of trees
was converted
by airport, several residences and factory.
In addition
, new railway that connected between west and east had
also
newly
built.

IELTS academic The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

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