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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. REVk
Few individuals have an opinion that they enjoy watching films in our phones or tables and doesn't require to go to a theater to watch them. However, some group of people are interested to see the films in the cinema hall. This essay will discuss both the opinion. A lot of people feel comfortable watching a film at home in their own devices. They feel more convenient. For example, people can move around and pause the video when ever they want. It has more advantage for those who doesn't have patience to sit for long time. Moreover, parents with small kids always prefer to be in this category. Another huge advantage is that numerus mothers do their house hold work along with watching film. So its time saving. They also think that it can spread a lot of communicable diseases if we are in a crowded place. On the other hand, there are people who loves to go to theater to watch films. We don't get the same feeling if we do it at home. Its a pleasurable moment that one can enjoy moving out with family or friends. It gives a change to our monotonous routine works. In addition to that, kids enjoy having snacks at the theater more than the movie. We get to meet many people. In conclusion, Digital world brought us in to our own cocoon. However, there are people still going to the cinema hall even after coming up of digital word.
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the films in the cinema hall. This essay will discuss both the opinion.
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A lot of
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people
feel comfortable watching a film at home in their
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own
devices. They feel more convenient.
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,
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people
can
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move
around and pause the video when ever they want. It has more advantage for those who doesn't have patience to sit for long time.
Moreover
, parents with
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small
kids always prefer to be in this category. Another huge advantage is that
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mothers do their
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hold work along with watching film.
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its time saving. They
also
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that it can spread
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communicable diseases if we are in a crowded place.
On the other hand
, there are
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people
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loves
to go to theater to
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watch
films. We don't
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get
the same feeling if we do it at home.
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a pleasurable moment that one can enjoy moving out with family or friends. It gives a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to our monotonous routine works.
In addition
to that, kids enjoy having snacks at the theater more than the movie. We
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get
to
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meet
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many
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people
.
In conclusion
, Digital world brought us in to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
cocoon.
However
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
still
going to the cinema hall even after coming up of digital word.
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IELTS academic Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

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