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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. wdaq
The given maps provide information about developments that have taken place at Queen mary hospital for over 40 years. Overall, it is seen clearly from three maps that the hospital expanded its building throughout the time. Meanwhile, there were added new services like the cancer centre, pharmacy, and nursing school during the given period. To embarks with, in 1960, the hospital located on the right side of the map beside the shopping centre. The shopping centre was transformed into a cancer centre and pharmacy in 1980. In 1980, the nursing school was built in the place of farmland, while the space of car parking remained the same for twenty years. By contrast, in 2000, the main building of the hospital and pharmacy were both remained in the same positions. However, the size of both a nursing school and a car park were reduced in 2000. Moreover, during 1980 to 2000, the cancer centre showed drastically increments in its’ building, which hold nearly one-third of the place as per map in 2000.
The
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provide information about developments that have taken place at Queen
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mary
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hospital
for over 40 years.

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, it is
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seen
clearly
from three
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maps
that the
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hospital
expanded its building throughout the time. Meanwhile, there were
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added
new services like the cancer
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centre
, pharmacy, and nursing school during the
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given
period.

To embarks with, in 1960, the
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hospital
located on the right side of the
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map
beside the shopping
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centre
. The shopping
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centre
was transformed
into a cancer
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centre
and pharmacy in 1980.

In 1980, the nursing school
was built
in the place of farmland, while the space of car parking remained the same for twenty years.

By contrast, in 2000, the main building of the
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hospital
and pharmacy were both remained in the same positions.
However
, the size of both a nursing school and a car park were
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reduced
in 2000.
Moreover
, during 1980 to 2000, the cancer
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centre
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showed
drastically
increments in
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its’
building, which hold
nearly
one-third of the place as per
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map
in 2000.

IELTS academic The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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