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The average proportion of saturated fats, sodium and added sugar in typical meals, which consumed too much, might be unhealthy is presented in pie charts.

The average proportion of saturated fats, sodium and added sugar in typical meals, which consumed too much, might be unhealthy is presented in pie charts. KEW6
The average proportion of saturated fats, sodium and added sugar in typical meals, which consumed too much, might be unhealthy is presented in pie charts. Overall, consumption on snacks and dinner took place as the highest proportion in three types of nutrients, albeit lunch as the second popular meals in the USA. At the end, breakfast always become the minority consumption by resident. Regarding on sodium and saturated fat that dinner as the high consumption at 43% and 37%, respectively. Nonetheless, lunch is the second popular meals showed 29% and 26%, a difference is 3%. Obviously, breakfast and snack have the alike percentage at 14% compared to another nutrients showed 21% and 16%. As the graph shows, added sugar have an enormous meals consumed in the USA, a great deal of people like to eat snack exactly in 42%. Moreover, it is following the huge number is dinner at 23% of society choose to consume it. Finally, lunch and breakfast as the lower just under 20%.
The average proportion of saturated fats, sodium and
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, which consumed too much, might be unhealthy
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, consumption on snacks and dinner took place as the highest proportion in three types of nutrients, albeit lunch as the second popular
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meals
in the USA. At the
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, breakfast always become the minority consumption by resident.

Regarding on sodium and saturated
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that dinner as the high consumption at 43% and 37%,
respectively
. Nonetheless, lunch is the second popular
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29% and 26%, a difference is 3%.
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, breakfast and snack have the alike percentage at 14% compared to another nutrients
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21% and 16%.

As the graph
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,
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sugar have an enormous
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consumed in the USA, a great deal of
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like to eat snack exactly in 42%.
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, it is following the huge number is dinner at 23% of society choose to consume it.
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, lunch and breakfast as the lower
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under 20%.
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IELTS academic The average proportion of saturated fats, sodium and added sugar in typical meals, which consumed too much, might be unhealthy is presented in pie charts.

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