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The maps below show the changes at a theatre in 2010 and 2012.

The maps below show the changes at a theatre in 2010 and 2012. DNamp
The diagrams illustrate how a theatre transformed over 2 years. Generally, some noticeable renovations and constructions can be witnessed, which were inclined to be in terms of the size expansion and interior design. Such changes were principally in the left of the theatre and to satisfy the people’s demands about human capacity and tourism. As shown in the maps, a dressing room, which had been positioned on the Northern side, was inverted to be significantly smaller and located to the Northwest side. Nearby this room, there was a desolating hall wrecked out. This allowed the stage’s size to be doubled. On the right of the theatre, the old storage located on the Northeast side was renovated to be on the Southwest side where the old admin and ticket office had been positioned. In 2012, the admin office switched the position with the old storage, while the ticket office was moved to the Southeast side. Furthermore, there had been a cafe in that location, which was removed after 2 years. While the auditorium and main door remained unchanged, coordination was erected at the space of the old dressing room on the Northern side. Additionally, next to the stage, showers were installed on the left side. Regarding the southern side, a restaurant was constructed between the storage and ticket office, where had used to be an empty destination.
The diagrams illustrate how a
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theatre
transformed over 2 years.

Generally
,
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some
noticeable renovations and constructions can
be witnessed
, which
were inclined
to be in terms of the size expansion and interior design. Such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
were
principally
in the
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left
of the
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theatre
and to satisfy the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s demands about human capacity and tourism.

As shown in the maps, a dressing room, which had
been positioned
on the Northern side,
was inverted
to be
The extreme adjective for small is "tiny", or "minimal".
significantly smaller
and located to the Northwest side. Nearby this room, there was a desolating hall wrecked out. This
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allowed
the stage’s size to
be doubled
. On the right of the
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theatre
, the
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old
storage located on the Northeast side
was renovated
to be on the Southwest side where the
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old
admin and ticket
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office
had
been positioned
. In 2012, the admin
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office
switched the position with the
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old
storage, while the ticket
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office
was
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moved
to the Southeast side.
Furthermore
, there had been a
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cafe
in that location, which
was removed
after 2 years.

While the auditorium and main door remained unchanged, coordination
was erected
at the space of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
dressing room on the Northern side.
Additionally
,
next
to the stage, showers
were installed
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side. Regarding the southern side, a restaurant
was constructed
between the storage and ticket
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
, where had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be an empty destination.
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