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The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of citizens who prefer to watch movies in cinema in the years 2003, 2004 and 2007.

The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of citizens who prefer to watch movies in cinema in the years 2003, 2004 and 2007. PrXdp
The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of citizens who prefer to watch movies in cinema in the years 2003, 2004 and 2007. Overall, In all the given three years the cinema halls were more occupied on weekends as compared to weekdays. On the other hand, the least number of people visited the multiplex on Monday in all three years. It is clear from the chart that, one in ten % of people were going to the theater in the year 2003. it was slightly increased in 2005 at 14% and fell down to 12% in the year 2007. The number of people slightly increased at 20% in 2003. Whereas The number of people who went to a movie was equal in the year 2007 on Tuesday and Thursday. Moreover, it was similar in 2005 for Wednesday and Thursday. It can be seen from the graph that, 30% citizens went to multiples on Friday in the year 2003, 2005 and 2007. The number was peaked at 45% on Saturday for the year 2005. Further, as compared to Saturday the number of people were slightly less on Sunday which was, 30%, 34%, 32% in the years 2003, 2005 and 2007 respectively
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movies in cinema in the years 2003, 2004 and 2007.

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three years the cinema halls were more occupied on weekends as compared
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visited the multiplex on Monday in all three years.

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2007. The
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increased at 20% in 2003. Whereas The
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who went to a movie was equal in the
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2007 on Tuesday and Thursday.
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from the graph that, 30% citizens went to multiples on Friday in the
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2003, 2005 and 2007. The
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was peaked
at 45% on Saturday for the
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2005.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of citizens who prefer to watch movies in cinema in the years 2003, 2004 and 2007.

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